Sometimes when I'm alone it snows inside.
The roof over head only holds in the clouds.
You think someone would learn to provide
something like a cloud vacuum, but not as loud.
It's cold when there's no one to lie with.
One string is a cord easily torn and broken.
I sit on the couch with real potatoes for pith
and the food always cools and springs are pokin'.
The snow melts sometimes and I see a mess.
It runs down arm or my head or my leg.
But when it freezes again I get depressed;
for me to leave my games, you'd have to beg.
It's hard to get out of bed covered in snow.
The sun breaks windows and I cover my face.
If I don't look then I don't have to know.
What I don't try and fail I can't disgrace.
Maybe one day the sun will come through.
Sometime before I'm covered and drowned.
But what else can anybody say or do,
in a room covered with snow and frown.
Wow. This flows really well. The rhyme scheme doesn't feel forced, which is good. (I find that's a problem for me when I try rhyming sometimes.) The lines "One string is a cord easily torn and broken" (Ecclesiastes, woot!) and "If I don't look then I don't have to know. What I don't try and fail I can't disgrace" are lovely and at the same time hit really hard - in a good way (I guess)! And I really like the image of this snow-filled room. It's sad and unfortunate, but why don't you just leave? I ask myself that all the time.
ReplyDeleteNice job. :)